There are some surprising twists in the story, but it's not so bad by far as idgal says above. Of course the story could have been better/cuter/steamier/longer. The art is ok. I give three stars for the story and art and one to compensate my predecessing reviewer, who is too harsh in my opinion.

Good start. Could be a really cute story. Could really be a lot longer and I would give up to five stars, but its too short, so only four.